Whale Fall
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Dress me up in my new threads
clasp my greasy palms
grease my hair
I'm ready for the fall
Watch at all the decadence
watching the avalanche
I'm slipping down
losing my buoyancy
What's become of us
where have we come
this far, this close
close to the doors
I hear them, sublimal chants
I'm on the run
I race through the human sea
I am the king!
I'm the slave
to my own undoings
I'm the jester in my courtyard
We jest as we run
We're strolling on that thin rope
we grope as we rope
we're true heros
we're the survivors
we're the scavengers
we're the friends
we're the lovers
we're the unbred
Soon awaiting the fall
we're lurking on us
we're osedaxing us
we're soon going to be done
we'll soon be arrested
*osedax(bone devourer, newly discovered marine genus) feeds on a fallen(sunken) whale carcass(which is also called a whale fall). Read more here
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Dress me up in my new threads
clasp my greasy palms
grease my hair
I'm ready for the fall
Watch at all the decadence
watching the avalanche
I'm slipping down
losing my buoyancy
What's become of us
where have we come
this far, this close
close to the doors
I hear them, sublimal chants
I'm on the run
I race through the human sea
I am the king!
I'm the slave
to my own undoings
I'm the jester in my courtyard
We jest as we run
We're strolling on that thin rope
we grope as we rope
we're true heros
we're the survivors
we're the scavengers
we're the friends
we're the lovers
we're the unbred
Soon awaiting the fall
we're lurking on us
we're osedaxing us
we're soon going to be done
we'll soon be arrested
*osedax(bone devourer, newly discovered marine genus) feeds on a fallen(sunken) whale carcass(which is also called a whale fall). Read more here
Tarry,
ReplyDeleteVery interesting stuff, but one question - what exactly is a threnody (too lazy to look it up myself)? I enjoy writing poetry in my spare time (hah - who has SPARE time?) and don't recall coming across this style before.
Thanks in advance, and keep up the good work!
Bill,
ReplyDeleteIt's funny actually, I remember vividly my dad looking down at me, with my first abstract threnody(a sort of cry, lamentation = my personal interpretation of Threnody is a cry)clutched in his palms. It' was hard as a 13
year old trying to explain that
you just wanted to yourself.
Good to know that you write too, it's good thing.:-) A good healthy soliloquy can be a good thing.
Funny I just finished my 2nd one and the title is a bold attempt from a seared amateur etymologist.
Thanks for the support, fellow poet ;-)
//trying to explain that
ReplyDeleteyou just wanted to yourself//
trying to explain that
you just wanted to talk to yourself
I've been writing poetry for a long time now (since I was 9), but haven't written anything in quite some time now. Need to get inspired about something again.
ReplyDelete"What do I do
When I feel down and out
To pick up my feet
And stop dragging my pride?
I pick up a pen
And a clean pad of paper,
Then sit down to write
Whatever's inside."
Wrote that one when I was about 15 or 16, can't recall. But it is commited to memory now as I tend to go back to it and say, "What else makes you want to sit down and write?". So what drives your need (it IS a need, isn't it?) to write? I like to find out why other people feel compelled to write creatively.
You're got a good memory. I think some of us have the need(and you're darn right, it's a massive need, you can't hold on, so you gotta retch, so to speak ;-))
ReplyDeleteI've been more of a rebel, a loner, a child, someone who'll always pick a path, walk alone, not to draw attention but because I somehow don't feel part of the herd.
But again I think there are lots of things that make you who you are.
Things like the vast space, theory of relativity,oceans(I've sailed for some 9 odds years and have written some 300 poems),humanity,dreams,cultures,religion/faith[hinduism, christianity(not due to my marriage to my dutch wife but my involvement in it),islam],...I could go on and on, I guess I just absorb stuff. I did make a start back in 97 on writing a book, which I definitely will write all the way.I have the cover, title, epilogue and prologue ready. All I need is a lonely place and 6 months of isolation...lol
and you're right, sometimes expression is a need. A huge need. :-)
But it's good thing, maybe this will inspire you somewhat ;-)
Tarry,
ReplyDeleteThank you. It is very thought-evoking to read your threnodies. You have a flair for this (as I am sure you know, 300 poems is a pretty good sized body of work for an "amateur"). And yes, it is inspiring as well (I now find myself intrigued by this style, want to learn more about it, try my own hand at it). Looking forward to reading more!
Regards,
Bill S.
Bill,
ReplyDeleteGreat! Let know when you've jotted something down as well.
Cheers,
Tarry
Tarry,
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to Part III (have gone back twice now to re-read Part I & II, very enjoyable if I can say that about a lament!). I actually have had something now for few days, but I usually sit on stuff that I write for a little bit, then go back and read it again to make sure it says what I want it to say. I admit I'm not too sure about this one, as I have had certain rhythms and style so ingrained in my writing that I unconsciously repeat them, so I have kind of tried to take the basic premise of a threnody and apply my style to it. I would be interested in your opinion if you are interested in looking it over - let me know either way.
Regards as always,
Bill S.
Bill,
ReplyDeleteSure , send it over to me. I'll be glad to read it.We all have different styles, that's what makes it all so special :-)